Fortschritt

[soylent.green]

<a name="planetz-file"></a><a href="http://www.konglomer.at/Topics/musik/fo ... .mp3"><img src="/forums/images/listen_icon.gif" border="0" alt=" Song"> Song</a><BR> <a name="planetz-tag"></a>Genre: Electronic<BR> <a name="planetz-tag"></a>Uses: Pulsar Effects,Pulsar Mixers,Pulsar Synths<BR> copyright © 2006 soylent.green<BR> _____________________________________<BR><BR> Dear Mr. Planet Z.

with this posting I send you one of my tracks. I put it together while thoughts about the ever faster pace the world is ticking puzzled my mind. Though madonna recently state "Time goes by, so slowley" I fell it's like the other way round. The german speech sample come from "read pleaze" software. The words - german:
"fort schritt halten
immmer weiter nach vorn"
and english:
"advance keep pace
always progress".
I hope you somehow like the track and expect your feedback kindly.

Sincerely,
Peter

[Leper]

Hello,

Your track was very interesting - The words gave it a partly serious feeling. I liked the 'sound' of the track, but i felt that the harpsichord/keys in the center mix were a bit too loud.

[kensuguro]

interesting beat. It's got an almost raggaton groove to it.

[Clamhead]

I liked it. Kinda like Kraftwerk after they've had too much coffee. How did you make that ping-pong-ball percussion sound? I wouldn't worry about the tempo - sounds fine. Just think of the tune as what it is and move on... I read recently about a fella (can't remember who) who treats all his music like stir fry. Chucks in a lot of ingredients, fries it up quick and serves. If it tastes good, great, if it doesn't... make another stir fry. At least everything then has the advantage of being fresh. Keep up the good work!

[AudioIrony]

Definitely dig the unusual beat in this track.
It stands up as an unusual and interesting track..... but......
I wonder if you would consider:

1. cutting back on the melody synth lines - play for 8 bars ( as a refrain or chorus) with at least 8 - 16 break with beat and bass only in between.

2. Use the vocal samples in the refrain sections and add some spoken poetry between the refrain sections (over the breaks - beat and bass?

There I go trying to arrange your whole tune for you - guess it's my version of Stir-Fry.
Cheers

[soylent.green]

Thanks for your replies!

1. cutting back on the melody synth lines - play for 8 bars ( as a refrain or chorus) with at least 8 - 16 break with beat and bass only in between.

2. Use the vocal samples in the refrain sections and add some spoken poetry between the refrain sections (over the breaks - beat and bass?

There I go trying to arrange your whole tune for you - guess it's my version of Stir-Fry.
Cheers

Ok, structure is the point, right? I allways structured my tracks by "feeling". I never applied some sort of rule, apart from basic things.
But I discoverd that usual song structurs wouldn't be to bad to have in some of my tracks. Any good web resource on "how to structur a pop song for dummies"?
Seems like I have to do some more theory before post more on planetz (got advice to go an learn about chords on another thread )

Peter

[braincell]

I like the way it starts but I feel the momentum gets a little lost after a while. It could use more variety.

[ChrisWerner]

I would suggest to break up the track sometimes, take off the beat and let the voice say what it has to say, then restart the beat and bring all together later in the track. I feel a bit stressed to listen to all elements from the begining.

Personal I would exchange the harpsi sound with an arpeggio sound similar to the other arpish sounds you use. Maybe some sine lead thingie and let it pass to an filter, to add movement to it.

Just only ideas of my personal taste and please keep up posting, don´t feel yourself under pressure by the other tracks here.

Overall I like the idea of this track.